It's a great start! If you do write more be sure to use the comments link below so we can follow the whole story. And don't take this wrong, but punctuation and capitals would help make it a bit easier to read. :-) I think you're a good writer!
Jun 12, 2010 Rating
very good by: Anonymous
this story was VERY good. I hope you keep on writing. Maybe someday you can be an author!!
