Hello! Great poem! I do have some feedback and I hope this helps.
"Heart In Hand The beat of horses hooves sound through my heart His sweet sweet neigh sounding through my ears Their graceful movements a blessing to my eyes His coat like silk beneath my hands..."
Notice how you used 'sound' and 'sounding' in the same stanza? Maybe you could use 'ringing' or 'echoing'???? Besides this, it's really good! You have a gift!
I totally understand how you feel. On my uncle's farm there's this beautiful black mare that just looks at me in a way that casts a spell through my mind. She's so lovely. My uncle rescued her about a month ago, but she acts like a wild animal! She stomps and rears, and it just breaks my heart. I know some day me and her will gallop bareback to the other side of the world, and I will be the happiest girl alive.
Oct 10, 2021 Rating
I Like it by: Anonymous
Great job, you have some really nice description in there. I liked it, it was nice. Maybe try using some more ambitious words? I hope this helps :)
Aug 01, 2019 Rating
Good poem! by: another equestrian
It's well written, you chose the words well. Cool title too!
