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Comments for Where the wind blows - Chapter 1

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Jun 09, 2011
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AMAZING story
by: Lana

I love this story! Cannot wait for part 2, I agree with Unicorn with the "She said" and "I said." Otherwise please please more!

Jun 08, 2011
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Thanks!
by: Carrigan

Thanks Unicorn :) I saved it as a draft then when back to right it later on so that's why I did that i think... I didn't notice that until I had already posted the story! :),

Jun 04, 2011
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This is good
by: Anonymous

wow this is...just...AMAZING! It made me actually feel sad....great work keep writing stories

Jun 04, 2011
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Thanks
by: Carrigan

Thanks everyone! Part 2 is coming soon!

Jun 01, 2011
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coming
by: Carrigan

Hey everyone part 2 is coming soon!

May 31, 2011
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Hi Carrigan
by: Unicorn

This is different, delicious, and delightful! Please keep writing. I love the plot, the use of symbols, the characterisation of Macy and Jessie - touching.

One small problem, you switch point of view a lot. We see it all through Macy's eyes, but sometimes it's in first person ("I did", "I said") and sometimes in third person ("she did", "she said").

Pick one and stick to it to avoid confusing the reader. Also, some of your sentences sound very breathless - a few commas could help.

Thanks for sharing this lovely story. Please write more!

Unicorn
writer of:
More than a Myth - Intro, Part I, Part II, Part III

May 23, 2011
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awesome!
by: Shine

this is awesome! I love the detail, the plot, everything!

May 21, 2011
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Amazing
by: Kaitlyn aka Horserider

Amazing! This story is both sad and wonderful! I can't wait until Part 2!!!:) Write more soon!

May 20, 2011
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Wow!!
by: Bec

That is one AMAZING story PLEASE write more!!!!I love it!!!!!!!

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