Undaunted (Sequel to Forsaken)

by Josh


Hey everyone! It's Josh again...
This is the second book I've written, the first one being Forsaken. It's written in a little different style than the last book, so be prepared. Hope you enjoy it!

April 1, 2019 8:36 P.M.


Chapter 1


This is it. The place where I'm supposed to stay until I'm at least eighteen.
Nervous chills run through me as I steer my car down the long driveway up to the house.
Lush green grass bordered by a white board fence stretches away from the road. Tall oak trees line the driveway. Ahead I can see the house, a two-storey black building with white trim. Beside and behind it are the stables, painted to match. The whole setup is huge- unbelievable for a city guy like me.
I park my car beside the cement pad and get out to unload my luggage.
Two black Labs are dozing in the sun and they both get up to greet me joyfully. There's a green-and-black BMX leaning against the house and beside it, a skateboard. Smiling, I set my own skateboard beside it.
The door opens just as I'm coming up the steps and a tall guy with tanned skin and blonde hair cut high on top and short on the sides like mine steps out.
"Jordan?" I say.
"That's me. Welcome here."
I follow him inside the big house. He leads me down a flight of stairs to the basement. The first thing I see is a pool table and a mini bar.
Jordan takes me around the bar into another room, twice the size of the one before. It's dedicated to gaming, with two couch sets and three widescreen TV's.
There's a short hall with four doors. He opens one and I look inside. I see a pool and a hot tub. Wow.
"Pool's heated. It feels good to swim after playing hockey or riding," Jordan says.
I whistle. "You bet."
"The room beside the pool is mine. You can have your pick between the other two."
After a quick look, I choose the one with an ensuite and throw my suitcase on the bed.
It's a spacious room with a king sized bed and a desk in one corner. The walls are gray and empty so I can decorate how I want. The entire room is decked out with a bluetooth speaker system. There's a mini fridge stocked with Coke, Pepsi, and snacks.
"It's awesome," I tell Jordan. "You…have money."
"Yeah." I notice him hesitate a little, a worried look on his face. "I guess Dad thinks all this stuff will make up for…well, you know…"
I don't know, but I nod. "That's ok, sorry, I shouldn't have said anything."
He grins half-heartedly. "Don't worry about. It's probably nothing. I'll leave you alone for awhile now."
After he's gone I take out my MacBook and flip it open. But I can't seem to concentrate on anything. Staring vacantly at the screen, I wonder what Jordan meant about his dad.
Could it be possible that there could be trouble again, even in such a nice place?
We go for dinner at 6:00. Auntie has cooked a pot of soup an made cheese toast for us. Jordan and I load up and I head for the kitchen table.
I hear a bang of the door and see Auntie freeze. Instantly there's tension in the room.
"Dad's home," Jordan tells me in a tight voice. "Let's go downstairs." He clatters down the steps at top speed and I follow slower, wondering what the rush is.
Then I hear it. A loud voice. Curses. A string of obscenities. I catch a "we can't afford to keep the damn kid."
Feeling sick, I plop down on the couch beside Jordan, who's fumbling with the TV remote. In five seconds loud music is blaring from the speakers, drowning out the angry voice upstairs.
Later in my unfamiliar bed, the voice is still echoing through my head. "We can't afford to keep the damn kid."
I try to concentrate on falling asleep. The last thought that runs through my head are Jordan's words:
Don't worry. It's probably nothing.

Hey guys, that's chapter 1! stay tuned for more coming soon!

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Jul 14, 2019
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Josh
by: Warhorse

Just curious, are you a western rider or an English rider?

Jul 08, 2019
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Thanks
by: Josh

Thanks for the comments K Clarkson fan and Warhorse! …and obviously y'all who comment after I post this...

Warhorse, thanks a lot for telling me how to post my pictures. I will do that yet, in a different way along with my SURPRISE.

sidenote: Although this story is written in present tense, it actually happened to me a couple of years ago...just saying so no one is confused.

Jul 06, 2019
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HEY EVERYONE!!!
by: Josh

I have a surprise coming for you guys... Stay tuned!
hehe! *winks*

Jul 05, 2019
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Josh
by: Warhorse

Sorry, me again... I just wanted to let ya know I updated my story. I had another few chapters added and I'll add two or three more next week. It would be great to have your opinion about the new chapters! I still have soooooo much to write till I get to where I am now so tips on writing style and such would be very appreciated!

Jul 05, 2019
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Nice!
by: K Clarkson Fan

Wonderful as usual! You always have a hang on the edge of your seat ending. Loved the humor you put in the part that you sound like Shawn Mendes. :)

Jul 04, 2019
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Josh
by: Warhorse

I like the update to your story. I hope everything turns out okay for You! Just remember that God will be with you no matter what. In the good times and the bad. No matter who is against you!

Jul 04, 2019
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Pictures
by: Warhorse

Josh, for pictures, you'll have to do a separate post. Click on the horse pictures link on the home page thing. Then share your horse pictures. I've done it a lot. You'll have to just say that it goes along with your story.

Jul 02, 2019
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Chapter 4
by: Josh

Chapter Four


The north road.
The words play through my head, Undaunted's hooves beating the time. I wonder over and over what Jordan means. Memories of the things Jordan told me in the pool steal back into mt thoughts. Could there possibly be something down the north road, someplace Jordan went to but wanted to keep a secret?
I remember the time Mom told me to stay away from a certain street close to my school when I was a little kid. I was too young to know it then, but there had been a gang of drug dealers hanging out there, and they were willing to do anything to a kid that spotted them and could potentially report them to the police--even murder someone if it were necessary. Is it possible that Jordan is merely trying to warn me of something?
Somehow, I don't think so.
Undaunted is beginning to notice that I am uptight. A cloud blows across the sun and I shiver, feeling goosebumps break out on my arms.
It's not because I'm cold, really. Something just feels…off.Suddenly without any warning, Undaunted spooks. I pull back hard on the reins and manage to stop him on the second stride, but now my heart is beating ninety miles an hour.
I don't know what he spooked from, but I suspect a snake in the grass beside the road or something similar. I try my go-to remedy: singing. I love singing and usually my voice is as good as Shawn Mendes', but now it just sounds shaky and less than reasurring.
I lean into Undaunted's thick mane, hating the feeling of insecurity. I came out here for a better life, but there are so many things Jordan is keeping from me, I think it's worse. His dad so obviously doesn't want to fork over any extra money to keep me, even though I'm mostly paying my board.
The world suddenly feels cold and void of love, and I find myself wanting to cry like a little kid. I feel a tear trickle down my cheek and I sit up fast, viciously wiping it off. I'm too old for kid stuff like crying.
The motion startles Undaunted, and he spooks again. This time I let him run. Anything to get away.
Away from what? my subconscious asks. I ignore it. I just needto get away.
This new life, which once seemed to be an escape, is now a trap.

Jun 25, 2019
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by: Josh

Thanks singin cowgirl! I will try to get Chapter 4 posted shortly!

Warhorse, how do you post pictures along with comments? I don't see any forms for them. Or is it possible to copy-and-paste them?

Jun 11, 2019
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Pictures
by: Warhorse

Josh, I'd love to see some pictures of your horse. Maybe you can post them on here?

Jun 10, 2019
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:)
by: singin Cowgirl

I was SOOOOOOOO happy to finally see chapter 3... It's AWESOME! You left everybody wondering what's next!

Jun 10, 2019
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Cool!
by: Warhorse

So far so good!

Jun 08, 2019
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Chapter 3
by: Josh

Chapter Three


"Hey buddy," I say softly to my horse.
He whinnies and trots up to the fence. I stroke his nose. "Good boy. Want to go for a ride?"
I climb over the fence and am on his back with a light jump. I nudge him gently with my heels and turn him around with pressure from my fingers. We head over to the tack shed to get a bridle.
On my way past the house, I see Jordan walking out to his truck. I trot Undaunted over to him and stop.
"You going for a ride?" he asks.
I nod. "You should come too."
He hesitates for a moment. "No, I have…uh…stuff to do."
I shrug. "Ok, I'll go by myself. Know of any good trails?"
He grins. "Yup. But I'll show them to you some other time. Stick to the roads today and get the area mapped out in your head. Have fun!"
"You too." I steer Undaunted back to the driveway.
"Hey, wait a second!"
I stop my horse and look back at Jordan. His grin has faded, and there is a warning look in it.
"Stay away from the north road!"
I nod and turn back, nudging Undaunted into a gallop. At the end of the driveway, I look down the road to the north. It looks no different than the south.
Whatever does he mean?

May 30, 2019
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by: singin Cowgirl

Sooo AWESOMLEY AWESOME!!! Can't wait for more!!

May 14, 2019
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Chapter 2
by: josh

Hey everyone...it's been awhile. Thanks for all the comments and sorry for not posting more chapters up until now! If anyone thinks its nerdy for a guy in grade 11 to be writing on this website, go ahead and think that. Truth is, I just don't feel like signing up for wattpad to write there. And if ya wanna know how awesome I am, just ask a few certain gals from my school! Lol

Chapter Two


I wake up early. The time on my phone says it's 5, but then I realize that now I'm in a different time zone, so it's actually 6.
Why not go for an early morning swim? I throw my trunks on and walk down to the pool room. To my surprise, Jordan's already there.
"Had the same idea as me," I comment, jumping in.
He grins half-heartedly like always. "I've been here a couple of hours longer than you. Came around midnight. Couldn't sleep."
I gape at him. "Dude…that's like six hours!"
He grins again. "Don't tell Mom, but sometimes I'll take my horse, Rebel, out for a ride. I do that way more than you'd ever expect."
"I'd like to come with you."
He looks at me pityingly. "Nah. You'd never wanna ride like I do."
"How do you ride?"
"Fast, the whole way. I go some pretty crazy places."
For a second anger flares up inside me. "I've been around horses most of my life. I can ride."
"I know. It's just the places I go." Then, as an afterthought, "Besides, some nights I go to parties or sneak my girlfriend out."
"Wow, that's some life," I say, amazed at him. Doesn't he ever get any sleep?
"Yeah," he answers. "But please don't tell Mom about my girlfriend. She doesn't like that girl."
"I won't tell," I promise.

May 13, 2019
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Wo-ow...
by: God Belivn Cowgirl

This is so great! Please please PLEASE continue ASAP! This is the beginning of another amazing story... I look forward to the next chapter!

May 11, 2019
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Nice!
by: K Clarkson Fan

I Like It! Awesome!

May 08, 2019
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...Warhorse
by: Josh

I don't remember if I commented on your new story or not, but I DID read it and I loved it! I can see the talent shining right out of it! Not that I'm an expert writer and judge of writing, but I can tell that you have talent.

May 06, 2019
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thanks
by: Josh

Thanks singin cowgirl! You bet I will;)

May 06, 2019
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Great!
by: Warhorse

Please continue! I'd love to read more! Have you checked out my new story yet? When I get some more comments on it I will post part 2.

May 05, 2019
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AWESOME
by: singin cowgirl

Okay, I loved it!!! Just as good as Forsaken! I am a writer and I just have to say that you have talent! Keep going!

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