Anonymous, I'm always glad to try and help if the writer is as keen and talented as you are. Not many writers appreciate the value of criticism. Even beginners can help beginners - and I really am a beginner! If you like, you can check out my own story, "More than a Myth" (it's quite far down the page) and any criticism for that would be really helpful. I'm going to read the next part of your story right now!
Mar 01, 2011 Rating
Thank you by: Ciarith
First I'd like to say thanks, I doubt I'd be able to continue the story if it weren't for your comments. Thank you Unicorn for your advice, I usually don't even notice those things so its nice to have someone point them out. The next part will be called True Dreams: A Cursed Blessing and is already up, just being accepted at the moment. Thanks again for your advice and encouragement, I couldn't have gotten the next one up without you, if only because you prevented me from having a nervous breakdown because I didn't know if it was even slightly good.
Mar 01, 2011 Rating
True Dreams by: Anonymous
I'll post the next one soon, its almost finished, I might even get it up today its title will be "True Dreams: A Cursed Blessing". I really didn't expect this to be all that good, thanks for your advice Unicorn and don't hesitate to be critical, as long as its helpful, I'm always grateful for a opportunity to improve my writing. Thanks everyone for giving me the will to continue this, I don't think I would have been able too if I didn't know how appreciated this was.
Feb 17, 2011 Rating
Awesome! by: Rebekah
That is such an awesome story. I love it can't wait for the next part!
Feb 13, 2011 Rating
True Dreams by: Unicorn
When I read the title I thought it would be good. When your first sentence had me hooked by "flicker of reality", I knew it was going to be excellent. By the end of the story I'm dying for more! You have introduced your hero with such poetry, such sympathy, such skill. Your description is the model of conciseness, but flows lyrically. "I am a creature of lightning and ice" gave me goosebumps. I can hear the stallion's voice even though you did not describe it.
My only suggestion is to check for typos a little - for example "are" instead of "our", "its" where it should have been "it's". But that's final-draft stuff, easily fixed. You've got a great idea, and please, please write on!
Feb 13, 2011 Rating
hi by: Anonymous
please enter this adress as a url: https://www.horsecrazygirls.com/midnight-full-story.html
Feb 12, 2011 Rating
It would be great by: Anonymous
It would be great, I'll help you if you help me with my stories if you like?
Feb 12, 2011 Rating
very good by: Anonymous
i think you have talent. it was very very good, i enjoyed it :)
Mar 05, 2011 Rating
This was an interesting story by: Horserider
This story really made me think. I really liked it!!! It was like i said interesting. when are you writing part 2???
