You say Snowy too much. Like instead of "You go mount Snowy and I'll get Snowy some treats."
Try this: You go mount Snowy and I'll get her some treats
Feb 08, 2011 Rating
Perfect! by: Shine
This is really good! Please do part 2 soon!
Jan 24, 2011 Rating
Thanx by: ranchgirl (author)
I will write part 2 but, first I will do a rewrite.
Jan 22, 2011 Rating
Tom by: Unicorn
Hooray! So you did write "Tom" after all! My favorite character is the narrator. And yes, I'd recommend that, having finished the entire story, you give it a fortnight or so to distance yourself from it, and then go back and rewrite - not because it's a bad story but because no first draft is perfect.
