I love the ending of your story. Absolutely magnificent! Please write more soon! Some suggestions: Firstly, the paragraph at the beginning explains Pam and Starlight's background. It can work better if you write that into the story. Start with the opening you've already written - Pam saddling Starlight and riding him, it's so beautiful - then perhaps they return and her uncle says something like, "You've done a good job with that stallion. I didn't expect so much of you when you singled him out from the wild herd I brought in last summer." That can just make the story flow better. Just a suggestion. Happy writing! Please add to this beautiful story. Unicorn writer of: "More than a Myth" Intro and Parts 1 - 3
