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Aug 03, 2011
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by: Evangeline

Like it?!LOVE it!!!!
but one thing...it sounds sorta like a book i read a while ago something by a name like the pony whisperer.....anyway love it!!!
Aug 01, 2011
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by: TG

I want to tell you, your story is absolutely AMAZING! I also am with Unicorn all the way! Horses don't see, hear, or smell the way we do! It's amazing how perfect their Creator made them, though! I love your plot and I can't wait to see it in the future! I like the title Raini's Gift, too!
Jul 08, 2011
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by: Allyson

sounds a little like doctor do little :P I love it!
Jul 03, 2011
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by: Amethyst

omg i LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! please write this book fast. i'm a really fast reader and i think im going to eat this up (not really lol)
Jun 29, 2011
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by: Anonymous

hi yeah you should make the horses be like huh who was that speaking, sorry this wasn't that much of a great idea. p.s your story is BRILLIANT!!! you could be an author one day
Jun 29, 2011
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by: Unicorn

Hi Carolyn
I just read your story "To Give my Heart" - and must commend you, you already know how to get into a horse's head! I loved the way the foal sees the world. Just apply the principles you used to write the scene from the foal's point of view, to the way the horses speak to Raini, and you're well on the right track.
Jun 29, 2011
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starstarstarstarstar 		Hi Carolyn
by: Unicorn

Sorry to get back to you a little late.
What I was trying to say is that the horse can understand and reply to Raini, only he mustn't talk English just like we do. Remember, a horse sees the world very differently from the way we see it.
I'll try an example... it's kind of hard to explain.
Raini: Did you meet that new mare of Angela's? She's a lovely bay colour, a Holsteiner with top-notch bloodlines. She's won a lot of ribbons.
Horse: I have touched noses with a stranger. She smells of pride and a place far away. She's dark in colour.
A horse sees the world through smells and sounds, not as much through sight. Raini and the horse, in the example above, are talking about the exact same mare, but they see her differently. The horse says that the mare is "dark", but not bay, because he sees in shades of grey, not full colours. He mentions her colour as an afterthought.
Raini might see a plastic bag rustling in the breeze; the horse would smell an unfamiliar, artifical scent, hear a terrible crackling noise like a wildfire, and see a bright white thing moving strangely. In that case it's no wonder the horse spooks.
Also, a horse has different body language to a human. If Raini is angry with a person, she could frown or press her lips into a thin line. A horse would flatten down his ears and curl his lips. When happy, Raini would smile; a horse would prick his ears and maybe whinny.
I hope that makes a bit more sense. The main thing to remember is that horses see the world very differently to the way humans see it. You don't need to let this concept crush your narrative - you don't even need to use it - but it could lend a bit more depth and creativity to your story, and make it more interesting. It sounds very interesting already, but a few little touches like this one can really make readers prick up their ears, so to speak.
Hope it helps. Happy writing! I hope to read your story soon, I know it's going to be great!

Unicorn
writer of:
"More than a Myth" Intro and Parts 1 - 3
Jun 27, 2011
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starstarstarstarstar 		Hey Unicorn!
by: Carolyn

I was wondering what exactly you mean by talking like a horse. Do you mean the horse understands what Raini is saying, but can't actually talk English? Thanks for the comment!!
Jun 27, 2011
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starstarstarstarstar 		Thanks everybody!!!
by: Carolyn

I'll definitely take your advice! Keep looking for part 1!! Thanks!
Jun 25, 2011
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starstarstarstarstar 		Great start
by: GK99

cool plot! love it =)
Jun 25, 2011
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by: Alex

I think that this plot is awesome! Here is a list of title ideas:
Raini's Secret
Raini's Gift
The Horse Whisperer
Horses and Me
Secrets
Talking To Horses

Hope this helps!
Jun 24, 2011
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starstarstarstarstar 		AMAZING
by: jakiebabe

1 word AMAZING! That sounds so interesting!
Jun 24, 2011
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starstarstarstarstar 		Hi Carolyn
by: Unicorn

Great idea! Please write the story, it sounds like something I would definitely like.
One suggestion - In one of my stories, I had a horse who could speak to humans. She talked like a human. That was a bad idea. A horse, even if it talks English, should talk like a horse. So when you show how Raini talks to the horses, try to make a definite distinction between the horses' and humans' dialogue.
Looking forward to reading the story.

Unicorn
writer of:
"More than a Myth" Intro and Parts 1 - 3
Jun 24, 2011
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starstarstarstarstar 		Great Job!!
by: Rayna

Wow! I love it! I felt like I was reading the back of a book! Great job, can't wait for the story to begin!

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