Part 2 is down at the bottom. I don't know why, but it's actually pretty far down there.
Mar 26, 2011 Rating
More Nightmare!!!!!!!!!!!! by: Lauren
Please write more Nightmare! And please comment on Dream Delilah Parts one and two!!!!!!!!!!!
Mar 22, 2011 Rating
great by: Lauren
Great story! Please read Delilah's Dream, the story I just wrote. Also, where is Nightmare-Part 2? I couldn't find it.
Mar 21, 2011 Rating
Dear Unicorn by: ExWow
Thanks for the compliments and advise, and since this is a true story you can ask me any questions and I can answer them, but I don't wanna ruin the story. And I will try my hardest to work on the setting and letting my character wander.
Mar 17, 2011 Rating
Nightmare by: Unicorn
Hi ExWow
Yes, please write more Nightmare! Sorry for not commenting earlier.
The last two parts have become more and more interesting... The plot grows ever thicker. Why has someone whitened out Nightmare's real name? How did such a well-bred horse end up being abused on a farm?
I like the characterization of Whisper and look forward to meeting Lex's buddies. I'd still like a touch more description and setting, though - you've improved, but you can put in a bit more. Also, watch out for letting your character wander about aimlessly - unless the character needs to be portrayed as aimless, it bores the reader. In Part 3, Lexus puts a halter on Nightmare, begins to lead him in, remembers his tack is still at his old home, and puts him back in the paddock. Perhaps you should delete that scene and let Lex remember, whilst watching Whisper and Nightmare, that Nightmare's tack was left behind, then she goes to fetch it.
I'm really enjoying this story - your writing style is tidy, but relaxed. Write more soon, please!
Mar 16, 2011 Rating
More? by: ExWow
Again, if you want more Nightmare, please comment.
