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Jul 22, 2016
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My Dream Horse - Part 4
by: AHorseLovingGirl4ever

"They have to find her!" Marissa thought worriedly. Marissa walked over to Willow's stall. She looked frightened because Hazelnut's stall was right next to hers. "It's okay girl." Marissa said softly to her. "They'll find her. I know they will!"

Just then, Amy walked over and said, "Hey, Marissa...Do you want to look for Mocha with me?" "Her name is Hazelnut, not Mocha. Plus Emily said to wait here." Marissa responded. "Well then I'll have to look for her myself!" Amy said while starting to walk away. "Wait!" Marissa said. "Yes?" Amy answered. "I'll come with you."

Then Marissa tacked up Willow while Amy mounted up onto Storm. "I don't think this is a good idea." Marissa said as the sound of thunder coming closer. "Oh,we'll be back before the storm hits." Amy said as the two rode off to find Hazelnut.

"Wait! Where are you guys going?! Emily said to stay HERE!" Called Jade just as they reached the barn door. "We're going to go find Mocha! Want to join us?"Amy said. "NO! I am NOT going to join you in your little trouble making plan, AMY!" Jade said firmly. "Do as you wish." Amy said while turning back to the trail. Then looking at Marissa she said, "We'll be fine without her. And we're gonna find Mocha."

"You mean Hazelnut." Marissa corrected while looking towards Jade. She turned away the second she saw Marissa look at her. Marissa sighed as they rode down the trail with the storm approaching fast.

"We've gone out pretty far, Amy. Do you think we should go back?" Marissa asked after a while of riding. "NO! I'm not turning back! Don't be a chicken! We have plenty of time!" Amy answered. "I have a bad feeling about this." Marissa thought as she rode on.

Soon, Marissa felt a drop of rain. "Amy? I think that we should go back NOW." Marissa told her. "Wait! There's Mocha!!" Amy exclaimed. "What?! Mocha? You found her, Amy!"Marissa said excitedly. "You mean, WE found her." Amy said. Marissa just smiled as they walked towards Mocha,ignoring the sound of thunder.

Then, it started to rain. "We better hurry!" Marissa said while mounting off of Willow.
"Who's gonna ride her?" Amy said. Marissa was surprised by the question and said, "What? I thought we were just going to lead her back!" Marissa said. "Well then I'll ride her." Amy said while mounting off her horse. "No. I'll ride her!" Marissa said boldly.

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Jul 21, 2016
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Love it!!!
by: Horse-Lover-Forever

I love the Mocha. It's so cute! I really do hope they find Mocha/Hazelnut. Keep it up!

Jul 20, 2016
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Part 4 please!
by: Sydney at HorseCrazyGirls.com

Will they find Hazelnut/Mocha? What happens next? :)

Jul 20, 2016
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Hi!!!
by: The Author

PLZZZZZ COMMENT if you want more! Thanks! :)

Jul 14, 2016
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My Dream Horse - Part 3
by: AHorseLovingGirl4ever

When Marissa walked up right next to Emily, she said, "Are we starting lessons yet?" Then Emily turned to her and replied, "Oh! Yes, we will be starting once everyone's ready. So what horse would you like to ride?" "Can I ride...the new horse?" Marissa asked.

"Hmmm. We just got her and you're here to learn how to ride... Not yet. I will tell you when she is ready to be ridden. But you could ride Willow over here." Emily told her. Marissa looked over and saw a palomino mare in the stall next to her. "She is a very sweet horse." Emily added. "Yeah, I guess I'll ride her." Marissa said willingly. "I wish that I could ride Mocha-I mean "Hazelnut" sooo bad!!" Marissa thought slightly mad.

Soon, it was time for her lessons to start. "Hey Emily!" Said a girl riding a beautiful Bay stallion named Storm. "Who's the new girl?" She ended snottily. "Amy! Her name is Marissa and you are going to be nice!" Emily replied. During this whole time, Jade didn't even look at Marissa once.

"She is making a big deal out of this." Thought Marissa. "But I'll try do what she wants - which is, name Mocha, Hazelnut."

"Okay everyone! Let's get started!" Emily said.
Then they started lessons. It went pretty well for Marissa,though it was only her second time riding a horse. "Good job, Marissa!" Emily said to her as she came over. "Thanks!" Marissa replied. Then she looked over at Jade and said, "You are a great rider."

"Oh. Thanks Marissa." Jade replied stubbornly. "I'm really sorry, Jade. I didn't know." Marissa said trying to get her friend back. "It's fine." Jade told her still trying to recover.

Then, Amy said, "Hey.. Marissa. Is Jade your friend?" "Yeah, but she's a bit angry about what I said earlier." She replied. "What did you do?" Amy said trying to get every word out of her. "I just asked if she could name the new horse Mocha." Marissa explained. "That's all? Wow. She is waaay over reacting!" Amy said meanly. "No, it's all my fault. I should've just been quiet about it." Marissa said trying to defend her friend.

Just then, after everyone has put their horses in their stalls, there was a loud crack of thunder. Hazelnut got scared and managed to get out of her stall. "Mocha!!" Marissa yelled. Jade gave Marissa you-are-not-sorry look. Marissa didn't know what to do. She saw Hazelnut run out of the stable. Soon, she was out of sight. "Me and Jason are going to go after her, you all stay here. Alright?" Emily said while mounting onto a horse. Jason is a stable hand at Pine Meadow Stables. He looked around the same age as Marissa-who was 13.

"Wait!" Marissa called as Emily was about to ride off. "Can I help?" "I'm sorry Marissa but you have to stay here! We'll be back." Emily told her.
"We'll find her." Jason said as he passed Marissa.

That's part 3! Hope you like it! Part 4 will be coming soon!! ;)

Jul 14, 2016
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PART 3 PLZ!
by: Anonymous

C'mon!!! You have GOT to make a part 3!!! You are TOTALLY keeping me in suspense!

Jul 14, 2016
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Oh my!
by: Anonymous

I am so happy for you that you finally got your dreams of riding!! I am so sorry for Jade tho, with her horse, :(
But yay! You get to ride!

Jul 13, 2016
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Part 3 please!!!
by: Beckiehorselover

I LOVE it!!! Please write more!!!!

Jul 08, 2016
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love it!
by: claudiahorselovr

I want a part 3!

Jul 08, 2016
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My Dream Horse - Part 2
by: AHorseLovingGirl4ever

When they pulled into Pine Meadow Stables they saw some people unloading a Chestnut paint mare! But this horse looked not well-taken cared of by the last owners. You could see her ribs and she had a bad scrape on her front leg. She was a bit wild as Marissa watched them try to get her out of the trailer.

"Mom! Look!" Marissa exclaimed when she saw the horse. "Good thing they brought this horse here!" Mom replied. "I wonder what would have happened if they didn't save this horse?" Marissa thought as they parked and got out of the car.

They both walked to the office of Pine Meadow Stables. They walked in with a warm greeting, "Hi! I'm Emily, the riding instructor here. Are you here for lessons?"

"Yes, we are. Are you going to be her riding instructor?" Mom said while looking down at Marissa.

"Yes I will!! So who is this?" Emily asked. "This is Marissa." Mom said. Just then, Jade walked in and said, "Hi Marissa!! You're here!!"

"Hi Jade!! I can't wait to get started!!" Marissa replied. Then Mom motioned the two that they could leave.

As they walked out, Marissa said, "I really am sorry about Sugar."

"I know, but did you see that horse that they just unloaded out of the trailer?!" Jade said while trying to change the subject.

"Oh yes!! She is my dream horse-well, after some fixing up. Does she have a name?" Marissa asked.

"No, not yet! But they said that I can name her!!" Jade replied.

"WHAT?!?! PLEASE name her Mocha!!! PLEASE!!" Marissa exclaimed.

"Why?" Jade asked.

"That's my dream horse and she needs my dream horse name!" Marissa explained.

"I was thinking of naming her Hazelnut!" Jade said.

"That's a great name but my dream name for THIS horse is Mocha!" Marissa said pleadingly.

"I'm sorry but Emily said that I could name her, not you." Jade replied while walking into the stable.

"Great, now she's mad at me." Marissa thought while walking back to the office as Mom was coming out. "Bye Mom." Marissa said.

"Bye! Have a good time!" Mom said while getting into the car. Marissa waved as Mom drove away and thought, "This is not going to be a very good day." Then she walked over to Emily, who was walking into the stable to start lessons.

To Be Continued... Part 3 coming soon!

Jul 08, 2016
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by: Anonymous

PART 2 PART 2 PART 2!

Jul 07, 2016
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Love it! ;)
by: Anonymous

I love this! What did they see?!?!? Please write more!! :{

Jul 07, 2016
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More...
by: Sydney at HorseCrazyGirls.com

What did they see? Part 2, please!

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