Hi Savannah, Thanks a lot for the tips! I really appreciate it. Part II will be more active. It's always great to have feedback on my stories. Don't talk yourself down - you're a fabulous writer! Thanks again.
Apr 25, 2011 Rating
0.o by: S a v a n n a h
I agree, some of t was a bit tricky. You have a huge vocabulary, but i suggest simpler words with more meaning. Your story is everything it should be, but give more of the plot, more of the characters away at the start. Long stories are good- but what is not needed in them?
I don't really get the wooden unicorns- i get that flaristine is grumpy about not riding, but why is she when she is in a stable? You are a great writer..better than me by far, and just wanted to give you a few tips and so :)
Apr 06, 2011 Rating
From the Author by: Unicorn
Hi Amy, I'm sorry to hear that. Which parts were hard to understand? I'd like to know so that I can fix them, but I see the formatting didn't work out very well during the transition from the Camargue Marshes - where Demi and Faustine live - to the gathering of unicorns and back. I'd suggest you read "More than a Myth - Intro" if you haven't already and see if that maybe clears a few things up, but I'm sure that I've made an error if it's unclear.
Hi Bec, I'm glad you liked it! I'll be writing Part II soon. If either of you have written any stories on here, drop me a line and I'll gladly read and comment.
Thanks a lot for commenting.
Apr 02, 2011 Rating
Wow!!!!!!!!!!!! by: Bec
That is a really good story!!! Hope you will keep writing it!!! I really enjoyed it!!!
