I like that you took time to rewrite this. I can't wait to see the rewritten version of part 2.
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Apr 29, 2011 Rating
Hi Lauren by: Unicorn
See? You've already picked up a few holes in the story - and fixed them beautifully! Rewriting is fun, isn't it? You've definitely improved on it, and it was good to start with. I like the new conflict with Sasha. I'm beginning to understand Sarah now; she's much more of a person. Please keep writing!
Unicorn writer of: "More than a Myth" Intro, Part I, Part II
