Cheska - Part 1

by Rayna
(Arizona)

Cheska

Cheska

"Excuse me?" I exclaimed, jumping the fence. I raced over to the boy who was suppose to be taking my mare for a quick ride. Now he was beating her with his fists.

"LEAVE HER ALONE!" I exclaimed, pulling Billy away.

"That horse bit me!" Billy showed me his unmarked hand. I snorted.

"She wouldn't bite anyone! How dare you!" I exclaimed, throwing my hand sup into the air.

"Cosette, Cheska is a mean horse." Billy growled, stomping away. Cheska was a bit moody,and she wasn't very well behaved around other people, but she wasn't mean.

I turned to the stout bay mare. "He's gone now girl." I soothed, gently stroking her shiny dark neck. Cheska tossed her mane, her eyes still wide. Suddenly I noticed a few bleeding scratches. "I'm going to kill him." I growled, pulling a tissue out of my pocket. Quickly I dabbed the blood out of the cuts on her shoulder, and grabbed the reigns. Walking beside her, I led Cheska back home.
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omg sorry it's so short o.o

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May 01, 2011
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I love this plot!
by: Shine

I love this! Please keep this up! And could you check my stories Blossom? Thanks! And again, I love it!

Apr 29, 2011
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Stellar
by: Jess

A Stellar job! ( I love that word )
One question: who is Billy? Her little brother? An annoying little neighbor?

Apr 27, 2011
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Hi Rayna
by: Unicorn

It's great, as always! I've read a lot of your stories and you're really progressing as an author. I already like Cosette a lot, she's a good solid character, not scared of much, though Cheska is her soft spot. I only picked up a minor typo - "reigns" instead of "reins".
Please keep writing!

Unicorn,
writer of
"More than a Myth"

Apr 26, 2011
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yaya
by: mozley

i think it rocks!

Apr 26, 2011
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Awesome
by: Kaitlyn

Its ok that its short. It doesn't matter. Good things come in small packages right? And I really enjoyed you story. Im glad that you stopped Billy, sounds like a mean kid. Who would ever think of beating a horse?

Also is this a true story?

Also check out my stories "Summer Camp Mystery, as well as Dreamer-(The One and Only)

Apr 26, 2011
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Awesome story
by: ranchgirl

I like your story. I think you should write part 2 soon.

Read my story Dream Come True and tell me what you think. Since you are a amazing author you tell me how to write good- like you. Also if you have a problem with your horse or want to chat just go to Have a Question. It's under training stories.

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