Blossom - Part 3

by Shine
(USA)

Hi guys. Sorry my story is late but enjoy.
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I tacked Blossom up just like Aunt Florence showed me to. Even though Becky let me tack up her horse once and a while before, I wasn't a expert. After that was done, I led her out of the stables.

"Ah Blossom, I can't wait to ride you." I smiled as I watched her munch on a carrot I gave her. I patted her on the back. Aunt Florence came out of the stables with Jewel, her horse.

"You ready Laurel?" she asked. "Don't you think I am?" I joked. She laughed, the laugh I had grown to love. "Yes I'm sure you are." She helped me get on Blossom and then she got on Jewel.

We started out on a walk. Then a trot, then finally a gallop. It was wonderful to feel the wind by you, the speed, the freedom! I just felt, I don't know. I guess I'm overdoing it but it was wonderful.

All to soon we had to go back. "Enjoyed it dear?" Aunt Florence asked. "Yes. Oh it was very nice Aunt Florence. Thank you."

Three weeks later, at the dinner table, Father said that if I would like to, I could take a job so I could get horse lessons. "Really? I'd love that!" I exclaimed. "May I too take horse lessons Father?" Laura asked. Mother didn't look to certain. "I don't know. But maybe you would like to take violin lessons."

Laura was well known to love music. She loved singing and she often asked to have music lessons so she took this opportunity with out no problem.

That night I dreamed of horses and wonderful rides. It was almost real.
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Sorry its short. Enjoy.

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Jun 09, 2011
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AMAZING!
by: Carrigan

Hey Shine thanks for the comment on my story 'Where the wind blows' I love Blossom it's so AMAZING! I know its late to be writing this comment know but I wanted to read the whole series! You're a great author!

Apr 11, 2011
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Hey Shine
by: ranchgirl

I love your stories. Blossom is getting better and better by every part. Please write soon. I can't live without your stories. I can't wait to find out what happens next.

See ya later, Shine

Mar 31, 2011
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My pleasure
by: Unicorn

It's a great pleasure to help where I can. Writing is a lonely art, so feedback, however amateurish, can be quite a boost.
Please write on!

Mar 20, 2011
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Hi Unicorn!
by: Shine

Thanks for your comment, and your tips. I'm having a hard time doing Laurel's speech as you can tell so I really would like to thank you for your tip.

Mar 18, 2011
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Hi Shine!
by: Unicorn

I loved your Apollo story and Blossom is even better! The plot is strong and I am still in love with Laurel and Aunt Florence. I would like to see a touch more description - we don't really know what Blossom, Jewel or Aunt Florence look like - but you're doing great. You did very well conveying Laurel's feelings as she rode Blossom. She's naturally a little uncomfortable with words and finds it quite hard to express her feelings (I noticed this from her dialogue; she's in sharp contrast to Aunt Florence) but you show us just how great the riding makes her feel.

Your style is compact, which is helpful for writers - we're constantly trying to conform to word counts, and often overshooting them by miles. "Blossom" is a brilliant story.

Oh, and pardon me... but if you like you could stop by my story, "More than a Myth", and drop a line if you like it. I think I'm going to put up a new one, anyways - "More than a Myth" isn't doing well at all.

Keep writing!

Mar 18, 2011
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I did
by: ranchgirl

I finished Tom already. If you want me to add more just let me know.

Mar 17, 2011
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Hey Shine!
by: Kaitlyn

You're welcome for the comment. I read your other two stories and also loved them! They are very unique.I will also read Apollo very soon!

Look at my story "Summer Camp Mystery-Part 2" when you get the chance.

Thanks for the great stories! :)

Mar 17, 2011
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Hi Kaitlyn!
by: Shine

Thanks for your comment. Please do check out my story Blossom. I also did "Apollo". Hope you enjoy!

Mar 17, 2011
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Sure Ranchgirl
by: Shine

You bet I'll check out your new stories but you're not finishing Tom? Come on! I love your stories Tom! Anyways thanks for your comment.

Mar 17, 2011
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AMAZING!!!!!!!
by: ranchgirl

I love it please write part 4 soon. Please check out my new story Dream Come True.

Mar 17, 2011
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Nice
by: Kaitlyn

I have never read your stories before... But i loved this one! So I'm going back to read part one and 2!:)

Keep writing

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