Apollo - Part 4

by Shine
(USA)

I know, I'm so SLOW! Well here it is.
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At the supper table, Alisha thought about telling Mom about her idea. She looked at her Mom to see if she was in a good mood. Everything seem to be fine.

"Uh, Mom, I was thinking of entering Apollo into the show jumping contest and I thought maybe you could help me get better at jumping."

Mom seemed to consider it before answering. She smiled. "It would be nice if you could enter him into the contest. And of course I would help you but do you think you would have time, dear?"

Alisha's face went blank. "What do you mean about time?" Mom laughed. "Don't you remember your deal with Mr. Coleman for a summer job?"

Alisha slumped in her chair. "I totally forgot. That stinks. But Mom, I'm sure I can still work and ride." Mom laughed again. "Knowing you, I'm sure you would."

Alisha jumped up and ran over to her Mom. "So I can still can to do it?" Mom smiled. "Of course. Now finish your supper."

The few days got Alisha very busy. There were the chores at the ranch, then the errands at Mr. Coleman's shop. Then practicing with Apollo. Sleep sure did sound good to Alisha. But soon she got into her summer routine. Every time she went off a jump with Apollo she knew she would win the contest. Of course not every jump was perfect. Yet some how, Apollo kept Alisha hopeful. Every day came closer to the contest. And Alisha couldn't help but worry.

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Jan 15, 2011
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Thanks!
by: Shine

Your comments are all so nice! I'm really glad you girls like my story. Part 5 will have Alisha's Mom hurt so stay tuned in!

Jan 12, 2011
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Apollo
by: Anonymous

This story improves with every part. Keep writing! I cannot wait to see what happens in the contest. And to echo Alex, you do cliffhangers very well. Often they can seem contrived, like bringing the story up to a sharp halt - kind of like jerking on the reins of a racehorse who wants to gallop. But you handle them well. Not jerking the horse in the mouth, just rocking the bit a little to collect him. Fabulous!

Jan 12, 2011
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Cool!
by: Alex

Keep writing! You are a good writer, always leaving the readers on a cliff hanger. (in case you don't know, a cliff hanger is a really important part in a story. It makes readers chew their nails because they want to read what happens next.)

Jan 11, 2011
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GREAT STORY!
by: Anonymous

please hurry up! i really luv your book!

Jan 11, 2011
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Yes!
by: Shine

Yes, there will be more parts til I call it an end. Do you like it?

Jan 11, 2011
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is there another part?

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